Mentoring and the Internet, by Ted Nellen
Mentor to student:
I observed your home page and read your poem and essay on
violence, as well as your small bio about yourself I commend you
and your classmates on your project. You have a good start to
your homepage, and I look forward to seeing what more you do with
it. Might I suggest that you proofread your essay more closely as
you have made some grammatical errors that detract from the
importance of what you are saying Presentation is a key factor in
making people sit up and take notice of what you are saying and
writing I work with young people such as yourself in a non-profit
organization that assists students in gaining admission to
college and applying for the financial aid needed for them to
attend. In addition we offer a number of other services as well.
Would love hearing back from you, if and when you get a chance
Again, good start and keep it up!